Creature

by Acoustic Odyssey   Oct 24, 2016


His beauty reigned
just as the crow
amidst
snow stricken streets

Majestic
...misunderstood

Flawed only
by the skin cuddling
muscle and bone

Yet,

Thrust into mental slavery
simply because
fear outweighed conscience

Oh, how quickly
seasons change
in comforting eyes
When the unknown
Is brought upon doorsteps

Poor creature

Given breath
to satisfy an unquenchable
lust for knowledge
yet, you're the one

...who's learned
the greatest lesson

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  • 2 years ago

    by Kurt

    Strong imagery, masterful control of pacing and delicately chosen vocabulary. I enjoyed this greatly!

  • 2 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judging Comment

    The creature comes to life within this poem!!

    This piece brings it home for me with this creature tale... its perfect for the Autumn feeling... Acoustic Odyssey knows how to make the reader see with his words... just awesome!!

  • 2 years ago

    by Hellon

    So many thoughts are running through my mind after reading this...Dark, yes Dark indeed!

    His beauty reigned
    just as the crow
    amidst
    snow stricken streets

    Ok...black crow on white snow? (maybe some significance?)

    Majestic
    ...misunderstood

    Unsure of this reference but I think is holds a clue of some sort haha!!

    Flawed only
    by the skin cuddling
    muscle and bone

    Yet,

    Thrust into mental slavery
    simply because
    fear outweighed conscience

    I believe the crow is not recognised a bird of any significance and that is what you are suggesting here?

    Oh, how quickly
    seasons change
    in comforting eyes
    When the unknown
    Is brought upon doorsteps

    Poor creature

    Given breath
    to satisfy an unquenchable
    lust for knowledge
    yet, you're the one

    ...who's learned
    the greatest lesson

    Again..I can only guess but, I think you are saying that even the most mundane bird can be a winner, albeit an unnoticed one in this society...totally random thoughts from me lol!!!

  • 2 years ago

    by Em

    There are no words to describe this so glad Andrea nominated it.

    All the best, Em

  • 2 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I love your writing, always have!

    This piece is just wow!! I nominated this piece for many reasons... just wonderful!!

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