Comments : Waiting no more

  • 11 months ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Brother,

    I feel you... sometimes we are waiting to be recognized, but the sad thing is, it's very tiring if it's only you who is holding for the love...cheers to this...sad yet powerful moving piece

    Gel

  • 11 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Shanky,

    This is a heart-breaking piece of poetry from you. The last line and the affect it has is incredible.

    Well done on this,

    Ben

  • 11 months ago

    by Em

    Shanky, this is somewhat mysterious, beautiful and definitely sombre but you write it well full of emotions and lovely though sad imagery.

    The opening here is so hard hitting that you want to read on and find out what happened to this poor lady. The image of her pain trying to escape was sad but very mystical because wouldn't it be great if we could get this for real; people showing pain, love etc through their heart. Then you have it (I think) a long distance thing gone totally wrong and he has gone to find a more suitable companion who he can probably hold close leaving his girl behind and pining for him with pain throughout her.
    I do feel there is a word missing after 'over a thousand'
    All the best.
    Em

    • 11 months ago

      by DarkLight

      Thanks Em. will add times as the missing word.

  • 11 months ago

    by Brenda

    This is so sad. Unfortunately sometimes we cannot be someone else's happy. Wonderful write putting this to words. Well done-