The Sweet Taste of Abuse

by Missy Panda MayheM   Nov 16, 2016


Falling through the sky
Broken and Battered.
My beautiful Bright Wings
Have been Torn and shattered.

BOOOM

The whole Earth shakes & Shudders
As I crash down so hard the ground explodes.
Rock and glass fly through the air and,
For a moment Time on earth slowed!

Burned and bleeding almost dead
I rise from the ashes to fight once more.
Seeing thoughts and harsh memories
Filled with blood, guts, and gore

The lust for Abuse sets in,
I look for the Pain I know.
The dark recesses of my brain,
Are finally set Aglow.....

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It's super choppy and needs tons of work but I couldnt shake this terrible feeling tonight and just felt the need to post something to give me something else to focus on.

Comment and ways I could adjust it are always appreciated!!

Your Broken Panda Kitten
Lexi

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  • 3 years ago

    by Lost star

    This is wonderfully written, raw great imagery - don't change a thing.

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Aww Lexi. It's a pleasure, bless ya :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Hi, this is really good and despite your footnote saying it needs plenty if work etc well it seems good to me.

    1: The opening imagery here is of a beautiful angel falling through the sky with broken wings not because of what's happened in her life but what's happening throughout life, maybe I'm wrong.

    BOOOM
    2: I like this because you have to say it aloud to have more impact.

    3: Love this people thinking its an earthquake but instead its a broken, battered angel.

    4: Very very vivid imagery here of how battered and broke you are...

    5: Once we feel pain it's like we seem to enjoy it but hate it all the same

    Fab write,
    Em

    • 7 years ago

      by Missy Panda MayheM

      Oh my gosh >\\\\< my day has just totally been made. You are like my Idol on here and to have you say this about my poem makes me super proud of myself.

      Thank you so much Em,

      Lexi

  • 7 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Loved the imagery on the page and what you evoked in my mind.

    Well done,

    Michael

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