Comments : Luna (song)

  • 1 year ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Maher,

    When I saw this on the forum, the 1st line already gained my attention....I dunno why I like hearing or seeing that word LUNA...

    The imaginary pleasantly presented.... dude this poem easily consumed...glad you finished it already...

    Well done.

    Gel

    • 1 year ago

      by Maher

      Thanks Gel, glad you like it :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Maher,

    A worthy win indeed and a wonderful finished product; glad you were able to polish it off in the end. Lovely work.

    All the very best,

    Ben

    • 1 year ago

      by Maher

      Thank you, good Sir :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Brenda

    Maher, I am so glad you finished this. I loved it from the start and even more now. Well done! This is just lovely!

    • 1 year ago

      by Maher

      Thanks Brenda, glad you enjoyed it :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Maher, I must say this was good when you posted the 'unfinished' product to the group page but now you've finished it, it's perfect infact more than perfect.

    1: I must say I had to look up Luna and I came up with a Latin name for the moon or the goddess so I presume this is about the goddess or maybe not who knows lol the imagery here is beautiful of stars shining over her broken smile.. As you have used stars and shine I can only imagine this is about the moon??

    2: This is a short but powerful stanza because we have to go into love with all eyes and ears well, every emotion and sensation really but we should take it slowly as not to fall so easily (especially if we are met with a man/woman in tin foil pretending to be our saviours) though this is easy to say its not so easy to do unfortunately and very often we will fall hard and deeply for someone who turns out to be a bad egg lol I'll stop rambling....

    3: Love the imagery here.. I imagine as she walks your way everyone stops and stares, turning their heads to see if it's actually true, I don't know where that came from just how I imagined it haha.

    A warming smile upon her rose-red lips -
    she's looking straight as she tries to hide.
    Spring is blooming under her dainty feet;
    she calls my name and starts to cry.
    4: Absolutely beautiful, fabulous imagery and description. I like the imagery of spring blooming as she walks along, powerful.

    5&6: I like the repetition here, it seems to go round in a circle but a nice one... Not sure if there's even a thing lol.

    Fabulous as always, not done this in a while haha
    Em

    • 1 year ago

      by Maher

      Haha I miss your breaking down of my songs lol! You're right, I was likening her beauty to the moon. Made it a sunset time of day for that reason too - because she'll look even more beautiful with her smile when you have 2 moons out as evening comes :)

  • 1 year ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Its complete! Well done Maher.. i did also love it as it was :) well done!

    • 1 year ago

      by Maher

      Lol thanks USB, finished the music too :)

  • 1 year ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    So youll post on your YT account for me yes? :P

    • 1 year ago

      by Maher

      Maybe, but without vocals :p

  • 1 year ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Ill take anything i can get from you!
    Lol

    Edit: that sounded less "sexual" in my mind.. you know what i mean anyways :) i love your music SC

  • 1 year ago

    by lilly

    Awesome song

    • 1 year ago

      by Maher

      Thanks :)