A Chime Of The Times (senryu)

by Ben Pickard   Nov 22, 2016


Church bells serenade
A newly wedded couple,
soon to be divorced.

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Ben Pickard 2016

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  • 1 year ago

    by Mary

    Didn't really see that end coming Ben, but as I read through the comments I saw what you meant as having at first meant this piece for dark humor. I really like this and l am a fan of the Senryu poem but have never been able to create one that I felt was a true or good Senryu. I liked how the ending was a surprise.

  • 1 year ago

    by stormingdance (Jessica)

    See, I struggle to create Haiku's and Senryu's exactly to form. That last line being the big punch. Love it and totally unexpected twist.

    That being said, the divorce rate here in the US is about 40-50%. And what Autumn Breeze said is true. There are many parenting classes, surely there are co-parenting classes too? Would benefit the whole family.

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Jessica and you are absolutely right.

      All the very best,

      Ben

  • 1 year ago

    by Augustus Black

    If I go much deeper then I can also view the darkness which is painted very cunningly by the writer.

  • 1 year ago

    by Augustus Black

    Hello!

    This is a wake up poem and this kind of write should be taken more seriously. Yes, I agree that we live in a world of divorce. The term 'divorce' has become very common now a days. I see celebrities are much more involved in this topic. Money and adultery could be main reasons for divorce. People need to understand that the burden of divorce fall on the small children.

    Very true and very sad write.

    • 1 year ago

      by Ben Pickard

      "money and adultery" - two of the main reasons, definitely, Augustus. Although as I have said, for some people, there is no other option. I suppose I meant this more as a darkly humorous piece - not to judge in any way.

      Take care.

  • 1 year ago

    by Meena Krish

    I guess some of us will know already about certain couples who are heading towards a divorce even before they get married. The silly thing is some couples know it or see it yet they go through it perhaps blindness to the truth or their ego!

    Well penned..a sadness behind a happy moment.