Comments : A Chime Of The Times (senryu)

  • 11 months ago

    by Em

    Ben I like what you did with the title.. Like the sign of times but instead the chime of times to relate nicely to the content. Unfortunately this is the sign of the times as many people will not fight to fix their marriage but instead take the easy way out of divorce.
    Well done,
    EM

  • 11 months ago

    by Brenda

    Wow Ben, quite the twist and with a senryu to beat. Very nice and sad that it is indeed to common place. Well done-

  • 11 months ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Ouch! A tribute for Gel. .. haha haha. ..
    Kidding. ..

    So true sir Ben... sad truth

    Gel

  • 11 months ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Unfortunately ( I think that's the word) this is all too real for most of the population. simple solution, never marry! :)

    However, this is sad and rings far too much truth.

    See what i did there?! haha i'm funny today! :P

    well done on another great write benny... i look forward to anything new you post! as well as most of the people on this site!

  • 11 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    I like the title Ben; it really links up nicely with the volta.
    The institution that is marriage is long gone. It's all too easy to get out of a life commitment. Of course there are many reasons why this should be so, but the old fashioned values in me thinks, what a shame.

    • 11 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      I agree, Michael. Personally, I like the idea of marriage and I love being married, but it is sad to see so many end so badly - for whatever reason. Although I am also aware that there is often little option but to end them.

      All the best.

  • 10 months ago

    by Meena Krish

    I guess some of us will know already about certain couples who are heading towards a divorce even before they get married. The silly thing is some couples know it or see it yet they go through it perhaps blindness to the truth or their ego!

    Well penned..a sadness behind a happy moment.

  • 10 months ago

    by Augustus Black

    Hello!

    This is a wake up poem and this kind of write should be taken more seriously. Yes, I agree that we live in a world of divorce. The term 'divorce' has become very common now a days. I see celebrities are much more involved in this topic. Money and adultery could be main reasons for divorce. People need to understand that the burden of divorce fall on the small children.

    Very true and very sad write.

    • 10 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      "money and adultery" - two of the main reasons, definitely, Augustus. Although as I have said, for some people, there is no other option. I suppose I meant this more as a darkly humorous piece - not to judge in any way.

      Take care.

  • 10 months ago

    by Augustus Black

    If I go much deeper then I can also view the darkness which is painted very cunningly by the writer.

  • 10 months ago

    by stormingdance (Jessica)

    See, I struggle to create Haiku's and Senryu's exactly to form. That last line being the big punch. Love it and totally unexpected twist.

    That being said, the divorce rate here in the US is about 40-50%. And what Autumn Breeze said is true. There are many parenting classes, surely there are co-parenting classes too? Would benefit the whole family.

    • 10 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Jessica and you are absolutely right.

      All the very best,

      Ben

  • 10 months ago

    by Mary

    Didn't really see that end coming Ben, but as I read through the comments I saw what you meant as having at first meant this piece for dark humor. I really like this and l am a fan of the Senryu poem but have never been able to create one that I felt was a true or good Senryu. I liked how the ending was a surprise.