Comments : An Innocent Affair

  • 10 months ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Excellent write Ben

  • 10 months ago

    by Em

    This is excellent Ben had me in stitches :)

  • 10 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Ben,

    An interesting poem about regret. Regret for past demeanours. I'll be sure to look out for this fair lass and give her what for...

    How dare she entice you so with her plentiful breasts.

    Seriously though, I like your change of style.

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 10 months ago

    by Marvellous

    Sounds like some wright I made today. Really, our emotions inflame! But we've got containers for them. Lol.
    Besides context, concept looked same. It was as though, I wrote the poem. Did you equally rob my style, like the strange woman did your heart?
    Your adaptation is stellar! First time finding one, write like me..
    Deafening but thoroughly pieced work.

    • 10 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      I often write with this rhyme structure and syllable count, Marve. I can genuinely say - as much as I enjoyed your piece - I didn't have it in mind at all when writing this, lol.

      Thanks for your comment - take care.

  • 10 months ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Sir Ben,

    This is really an excellent piece. ..it's like I'm watching a movie here...

    well done

    Gel

  • 10 months ago

    by Brenda

    Ben, wonderfully written! Your rhyming was delicate and nicely spaced throughout. Well done-

  • 10 months ago

    by Ren

    Awesome, Ben! :)

  • 10 months ago

    by Mary

    Ben,
    I'm at a loss for words here, so I am just going to say I love this and it is amazing.

  • 10 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Mary, Ren, Brenda, Michael, Em, Naomi - thank you all.

  • 10 months ago

    by Marvellous

    Lol, bro.. No strings attached.. Just kidding, though.. Thanks and you too!

  • 10 months ago

    by Naughtymouse

    I am creeping about your profile again fella.....serial killer style lol

    This is a total Marmite poem, I love it because its is amazingly well written - I hate it because for some reason I'm having trouble commenting on it other than to say how great it is.

    • 10 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Well, Ben, you are the most welcome serial killer to stalk my profile, lol.
      Thanks for your time and comment,

      Ben

  • 10 months ago

    by nani

    This gave me chills Ben!

    -Nani

    • 10 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Nani and I'm sorry for that, lol

  • 3 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    This is really fab, Ben! Though the affair proved to be not innocent...and not for the innocent. :-)

    • 3 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks, Mel. I forgot about this one lol