Comments : Terminal Burrowing Syndrome

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Love certainly is symbiosis, or, rather, it should be/needs to be. It becomes very difficult when one half is too scared or has the wrong sort of temperament to commit completely.
    A melancholy and beautifully crafted piece, Mark.

    All the best,

    Ben

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Mark I was going to break this up but I couldn't because it's too beautiful. I am glad it's been nominated because it truly deserves front page.
    Wonderful work as always.

    Em

  • 1 year ago

    by Naughtymouse

    As always your writing is faultless, wonderful write and your format really controls the reader well.

    Ben

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Congratulations on your win. A wonderfully descriptive piece with a pleasing format.

  • 1 year ago

    by Everlasting

    Congrats Mark.

    That ending...

  • 1 year ago

    by hiraeth

    Thank you guys <3

  • 1 year ago

    by ddavidd

    Congratulation to you too dear Senyru.
    Also so wonderful to have you as a mod.

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Fantastic piece, well done on your front page :)

  • 1 year ago

    by ether

    Well,
    this is just great.

    I almost feel as though
    this comment is to be typed
    with shortened lines
    as the flow of the poem
    is still in my mind.

    Sometimes I feel as though your words are almost written for me which is really neat. I resonate deeply with so many of these little themes. Especially as I'm about to give a talk on endosymbiotic amoeba, and having learned extensively about the sympathetic/parasympathetic nervous systems. And especially as I have taken flight so many times in my life. The last line is so very morbid and also a bad habit I have, picking dead skin.
    God, I love this so much. Also, get out of my head haha.

    This has too much emotion to be in the misc. category but I can see why you had trouble placing it anywhere else; it is sorrow, nature, and love all blended together. My favourite themes.

    Sorry for the unrelated rant, I can't really pick any flaws in this at all.

    The use of the word "amalgamate" and alliteration on "western wind" were particularly enjoyed.

    ps. congratulations on the win.

  • 11 months ago

    by ddavidd

    I add this poem to my favorite.