Oceans may separate us,
miles definitely in our way
but hope keeps me going
that we'll be together some day.
With love deep in my heart
lots of ink within my quill
I think of you, of us
and I write of you still.
Your smile it is contagious
your eyes they hide raw pain
if you were here with me
I would love you time and again.
Your flaws make no difference to me
I will love you for a long time,
not finding you before
my joyous hearts only crime.
A nicely written piece here that speaks from the heart.
Well done and take care,
1 year ago
This is another lovely poem from you. The title for me works well because its an eye catcher and it fits the meaning of the poem and what you were trying to say.
Going from the title alone, and it being in the love category, I'd say you love someone that is taken and going from the first line someone who is miles away (an ocean between you). If you had found them first then you would be happy.
I love the poem itself though. The rhyming as people have said is spot on and works well with the flow of the poem itself. This is a kind of unique love poem in a way, because its in the perspective of what if, what if you had found this person first. Then you would love them the way they deserved to be. You have seen a picture or pictures of them to describe their eyes and smile perfectly. I like how you also did it in your point of view, because it makes the poem more personal, and in a love poem its a great thing.