Comments : If i had found you first

  • 1 year ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Distance can be a b***h in a relationship, it take commitment and work but it is well worth it in the end when you find your starmate....killer write Em

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    With love deep in my heart
    lots of ink within my quill
    I think of you, of us
    and I write of you still.

    ^^

    Em, your rhyming is getting better and better and more and more fluent and the above lines are a wonderful example of that.

    Take care,

    Ben

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

      Thank you both Bens :)

  • 1 year ago

    by ketaki

    Amazing poem very nicely wrote,good expression.

    • 1 year ago

      by Em

      Thanks

  • 11 months ago

    by Jamie

    This is another lovely poem from you. The title for me works well because its an eye catcher and it fits the meaning of the poem and what you were trying to say.

    Going from the title alone, and it being in the love category, I'd say you love someone that is taken and going from the first line someone who is miles away (an ocean between you). If you had found them first then you would be happy.

    I love the poem itself though. The rhyming as people have said is spot on and works well with the flow of the poem itself. This is a kind of unique love poem in a way, because its in the perspective of what if, what if you had found this person first. Then you would love them the way they deserved to be. You have seen a picture or pictures of them to describe their eyes and smile perfectly. I like how you also did it in your point of view, because it makes the poem more personal, and in a love poem its a great thing.

    Well done. X

    • 11 months ago

      by Em

      Thank you

  • 11 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Em,

    A nicely written piece here that speaks from the heart.

    Well done and take care,

    Michael x

  • 11 months ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Em. Well written. Well done

    • 11 months ago

      by Em

      Thanks Michael and N always appreciated :)