Blackhole (Acrostic)

by stormingdance (Lessa)   Dec 13, 2016


Buried here within my chest where the
Lights are all caving in from the inside out
All my senses bludgeoned by your voice
Chalking up my veins with your secrets, I don't
Know if I can keep it, I don't know if I can keep
Hollering for you to finally hear me, surely
One day you'll finally see the realest side of me, the
Light and joy yearning to break free - I'm not
Empty or broken, I'm just choking on the lies you sold me

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  • 7 years ago

    by Brenda

    Jessica, such a true write. There's nothing worse when you have your trust violated. You really did a wonderful write with this-

  • 7 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Jessica,

    I love this form. I have written many and whenever I have, I find they have a mind of there own. Or should I say, a way of giving a subconscious mind words.

    The word, 'Black hole' is visual. A powerful force, an imploded star, drawing all and everything into it. For you to use this as a metaphor for being lied to, treated badly really ups the anti. It screams with the same 'black hole' force - anger, frustration, its all there. I love the last line, it ends this piece superbly.

    Well done.

    Michael

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    One word.
    Nominated.

  • 7 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Jessica. Having someone we trust lie to us is hard. You have portrayed beautifully. Well done

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