Comments : A Croak To Unfreeze Love

  • 7 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like the way you have set up this poem it seems like each verse is spoken by two individuals who bring out their feelings. Which makes this poem feel nature and its living creatures have a heart and in that love too.

  • 7 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Lovely format. It takes considerable tweaking to create a presentable image with words. Here you speak in two voices, frog and the bystander. For some reason the short stanzas remind me of a well know Haiku :

    The original Japanese:

    Furu ike ya
    kawazu tobikomu
    mizu no oto

    Old pond -- frogs jumped in -- sound of water.
    Translated by Lafcadio Hearn
    ^
    This poem is both simple and complex. Your write is (to my mind) born from the same spawn.

    Well done,

    Michael x

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    All I can say is this is fantastic as always. Very thought provoking

    Em

  • 7 years ago

    by Brenda

    Lovely nature write, beautifully done-

  • 7 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    I love this one very pleasing to the eye. . It reminds me of the princess and the frog Disney cartoon my daughters watching yesterday. .. I think this is a double meaning piece.. I like the scene you like to swim into him hahaha. .. what am I thinking? lol

    Beautifully done. ..

    Gel