Comments : Love will save us (Acrostic/ Sonnet)

  • 9 months ago

    by Em

    Michael, I don't think I have seen an acrostic sonnet before so well done firstly on that. You always seem to Excel yourself but I guess you have to sleep of roses sp to speak before you can do the club workshop.

    I guess the moral of the story is 'love will save us if it's true love that is , from any beasts, poison or anything else that gets in the way.

    Kudos on a fab write

    • 9 months ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      Actually, Ben posted one before mine. :D

      They are a known form, but as you can appreciate this ups the difficulty.

      The essence of the story is his love has cancer. The only way to save her is to make himself and then her into a vampire.

  • 9 months ago

    by Em

    I must have missed that one but yeah I guess sonnets are hard enough without doing it acrostically too.. I think my brain would be mush haha

    • 9 months ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      I only gained a grasp on this format just over a year ago. Before this, I was unaware, and I guess wary of them. I feel, that by persevering with them, this has improved my other forms too. The more colours a painter has to hand, the better the painting, right?

  • 9 months ago

    by Kasie

    Beautiful and well written. I love the fact that it's a sonnet and acrostic in one. That is not an easy task to accomplish, but you sir, did it well. Well done

  • 9 months ago

    by Hellon

    I don't like sonnets but I do like acrostics so...I've got a bit of a dilemma going on in my head with this one haha!!

    Your wording has won me over in the end...it's also dark which is not normally associated with sonnets so, I feel you've taken a chance here and...IMO, it paid off.

  • 9 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Thank you, Hellon. I am glad I left you in a dilemma and that you took a step over into the acrostic waters despite being tainted with nasty sonnet brine. Lol

    Thank you for your vote of confidence. :D

  • 9 months ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Wow! A double form poetry. ..

    me too like hellon is not a fan of sonnets but I started to like it Coz of Sir Ben and also You. ..
    I like this tale like piece ..so powerful and and the imaginary was epic. .. very fine choice of words and for that you deserve a 5/5 vote. ..

    Gel

    • 9 months ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      I'm glad you liked it, Gel. They really are fun to read once you understand the meter. On you tube there are lots of videos explaining how to write and read sonnets. Take a look.

  • 9 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Michael,

    A very good acrostic sonnet. It is always harder to get the iambic meter right when penning these because we are boxed in a little more with the choice of words.

    "Enters" I hear the stress on 'Ent'

    Also, 'leaving' and 'satan' seem off.

    But, again, when I attempted one of these, my meter was all over the place.

    Well done though; there seems to have been a sonnet epidemic in my three day absence, lol

    Take care

  • 9 months ago

    by Everlasting

    Ah thank you!

    I had forgotten to continue the continuation of the Sonnet/acrostic I previously wrote. Lol

    I like the one you wrote. Though watch out for trochee words. Yet even better write one in trochic instead of iambic.

    • 9 months ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      Thank you guys. When I say these words out loud, I hear iamb, but now I don't know. I just write to how it sounds to be and try to start it off with an unstressed sound - 'try' being the operative word! lol

      Thanks, again. I really do look to you both to highlight these details.

      Luce, I might just take your advice - knowing me, I will write a perfect iambic sonnet for once! lol

  • 9 months ago

    by Everlasting

    If you have a doubt where the stress goes, try a dictionary. It highlights where the stress in a word is located. It helps a lot.

    • 9 months ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      Great tip, I'll use and share that. :D

  • 9 months ago

    by Brenda

    Michael, I liked this a lot. Not only did you write an acrostic but through in Sonnet just for the heck of it? I liked the story line, dark, brooding but yet love in there too. From reading your comments I know you struggled with meters but I think you really pulled a lot out with the confines of putting sonnet together-very cool!

  • 9 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Thanks, Brenda. I've been immersing myself in the Sonnet form, trying to improve my knowledge. They don't come to me quite as easily as they do for other writers. We won't name names, hey! But, I'm glad that Sir Lancelot sonnet show off has left PnQ's. Lol

    Workshop starts today!! :0)

  • 8 months ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Truly enjoyed reading Michael. All the very best