Untitled - January 10, 2017

by Everlasting   Jan 12, 2017


I opened the curtains of tomorrow
and saw the shimmering, gleaming rays of the future
shine before my eyes

I was in the room of my present
blinded by the light; trying to walk towards the door of my dreams
but always tripping and falling over my bed

My sheets blanketed me from my failures
and warmed me up when I became cold to the world

I slept rapidly to the reality
and awoke too somnolently to my days;
always feeling tired,
never being too conscious of what I did

Until I decided to make my bed

I became unconsciously conscious of my actions and thoughts
Living presently everyday

Awaiting until I could become
consciously unconscious
someday

Written by: L.L.

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  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Luce, firstly I would like to say wow and I am glad it's nominated as I am all out. This is mind blowing stuff and really makes you think.

    1/ What a fabulous, hopeful beginning which would be even better if we open a curtain and see what the future holds but then again, would we really want to lol?

    2/ Fantastic.. The bed I feel is just stuff getting in the way of your dreams, of being able to do the stuff you have always wanted and though they are in your grasp you can't quite keep hold of them.. I know how this feels.

    3/ If only blankets had these powers I would be under mine forever lol.

    4/ Depression can do this to us though I'm not sure this is what this is about, I'm stumped here lol.

    5/ I love this and it makes me think that you are now able to realise the mistakes you have made (and we all make them) and begin learning from them.

    6/ And I think we should all live each day as it comes because none of us know what's around the corner.

    7/ Wasn't expecting that ending but (and I feel this is what this means) death comes to us all though I don't think I'd like to be consciously unconscious... I imagine the soul floating around watching events unfold though.

    Kudos.
    Em

  • 7 years ago

    by Brenda

    Luce, just wonderful! Wow, my head is spinning over digesting this amazing write-

  • 7 years ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Luce,
    bravo on this I liked it. .

    consciously unconscious
    ^^^^
    this lines says enough. .

    Well done
    Nominated
    Gel

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