Propose (Form - Senryu)

by Augustus Black   Jan 12, 2017


He comes in with rose,
her strict mother sees him; he
runs breaking the fence.
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Date - 12th January 2017

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  • 4 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Hahaha...this is so funny! Very creative of you! I love senryus! This is just great. Glad to have found your work.

  • 9 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

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  • 9 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Augustus,

    A very funny piece. I was worried this would happen to me when I proposed...luckily I am a fair bit more nimble than either of my wife's parents!

    All the best,

    Ben

    • 9 months ago

      by Augustus Black

      Ha! Ha! Ha! Sir. Glad this didn't happen with you. Ha! Ha! Ha!.

  • 9 months ago

    by Em

    Haha, this is pretty the funny. The imagery of him having a rose in his teeth like you see in love movies going for one thing only (no not that I mean to propose lol) to be met with this strict lady and I imagine her to be like Mrs Trunchball off the film Matilda then legging it so fast he doesn't care what's in his path lol.
    Suggestion to make it flow a little better I think see should be sees.

    Take care,
    Em

    • 9 months ago

      by Augustus Black

      Ha! Ha! Ha! Your comment actually made me laugh.
      Ah! Em, Thanks a lot. This made me laugh too. oh, and yes thanks for the correction too. You got that right.

      Thanks have a nice day.

  • 9 months ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Lol....I'm laughing with the visual. .as if I'm the mom here. .hah hahaha. ...

    well done brother

    Gel

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