The Fall

by hiraeth   Jan 16, 2017


Your voice is a symphony -

sonata:
rainflowers recited in adagio,
while you pluck your
cured vocal chords
in f-minor melodies.

the lament swirls with crescent words,
marbled layers atop one another,
sifting thoughts into mausoleums,

but your falsetto rises from
a cemetery of weathered
rose-bulbs.

tracing daises
entombed in your hair
leads us astray -

take the bow to your throat
and play your song;

i'll harmonize.

truth overflowing
from y/our casket:

bleeding,
bleeding,
bleeding.

next time; instead of sugar, we'll ask for honey,
it doubles up as wound-dressing.

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  • 10 months ago

    by Em

    Well done on yet another fantastically written piece which is definitely deserving of front page.

  • 10 months ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Your writings mesmerize me Mark, u r absolutely an original poet with a classical modern twist.

    Also I am very happy that this piece survived for the front page this week. Definitely worth it.

    • 10 months ago

      by hiraeth

      Thank you so much!

  • 10 months ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Mark,

    Excellent write. My fantasy is that these are angels, fallen to earth to live out their lives as human, yet unable to die. [cured vocal chords; next time]

    They suffer the torments of mortality, but still have their ethereal & semi-divine ability to express themselves on the cosmic scale. [take the bow to your throat and play your song; i'll harmonize]

    Given your disbelief in such things, I find my fantasy ironically amusing, yet still it captivates me.

    Congratulations on your win!

    • 10 months ago

      by hiraeth

      I really like your interpretation; there was a stanza that was fully meant to hint at the idea of a fallen angel; the 'tracing daisies/entombed in your hair/leads us astray'. Very astute of you to pick up on it, especially when I was trying to be subtle about it.

      Thank you!

  • 10 months ago

    by Melpomene

    Mark,

    Interesting write you have here. I'll be honest and say that I understood only about 80% of the music references, good thing my best friend is a musician and music teacher eh, otherwise I may have been a little bit embarrassed with how little I know.

    It's the little things you add in your poetry that interest me most, stuff like 'y/our' that show your understanding of contemporary technique and I like that you're often experimenting in your writing.

    I think my favourite things about this poem is that I found it somewhat romantic in its own right: rose-buds, rain flowers, swirls, daisies, hair, these are some of the words that had me find a romantic atmosphere.

    "take the bow to your throat
    and play your song;

    i'll harmonize."

    ^loved the tone you created here. A real interesting piece.

  • 10 months ago

    by Brenda

    Wow, this was really a fascinating write. The rise and fall of a relationship and all the sticking points inbetween. I really liked your comparison using music. Well done-

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