Comments : Rythm of The Silent River

  • 7 years ago

    by Brenda

    Gel, this is just lovely, ahhhh, nothing like love...well done-

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Gel, here is yet another sweet love poem by you that is so relatable to many of us here..

    1/ This is a beautiful opening and shows I feel that this person makes you glow with love even in dark times which to me is a wonderful thing.

    2/ I absolutely love this as it shows he believes in you even if you don' And that he wanted your lo e regardless or so I think.

    3/ Aww, I imagine you walking with your head on you lover shoulders with your arms wrapped around each other, sweet.

    4/ Oh, why did you let the cat out the bag, sure I will pretend to be your lover for one night haha. ;) joking aside this is a lovely sentiment because as long as you can spend one night with this person nothing else would matter because of your love for them.

    5/ Love this.. Maybe to make it flow a little better you could write 'and watch for the moon to reflect'

    6/ This is a little sad but I can imagine you not taking your eyes off him incase it was the last time you saw him..

    7/ I don't know why this made me chuckle just imagining him smelling of chocolate but I guess you mean his sweet scent, cute.

    8/ love the imagery here of your heart singing of the love for them, a simple symphony.

    9/ What a beautiful ending.. No one else will know you or where you are I am guessing which means no one can stop you loving each other.

    All the best Gel.
    Em

    • 7 years ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Aw Em,

      thanks for diggin again....and yah I'm starting to let the cat out of the bag. .. but still supernumb oh I mean superman will not able to notice it again. .haha. ..

      While reading your comments my lips reached my ear lobes lol. .. you're so good in giving a comment. ..

      Thank you

      Gel

  • 7 years ago

    by ketaki

    Good nice thought

  • 7 years ago

    by ketaki

    Good nice thought

  • 7 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    First two lines -

    The whole world knows that Sun is the main source of light. And I think it's great honour that you are giving great respect to your love.

    Hey, Wait a minute...hmm.... I mean this is brilliant. Your every new love poems coming top of each other. I see a great power and respect of love. It's just like romantic tale. I don't have much words to describe the glory of this grand poem. Hope you will handle after this.

    Great poem. I like every single lines of this write. Keep on flying.

    • 7 years ago

      by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

      Yah I'm flying right now. ...remember I'm wonder woman. ...and my man is supernumb oh I mean superman. .lol seriously thanks for the beautiful comment

  • 7 years ago

    by Augustus Black

    Ok, yes I do remember ah.. Make sure that you take good landing if you are flying. lol... All the best..

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Gel,

    This is a lovely, soothing poem to read and the delicacy is added to by some clever half rhymes which keep the piece flowing nicely and prevents it sounding forced.
    Again, beautifully laid out, too.

    Well done and all the best,

    Ben

  • 7 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Hey Gel,

    It was the title of this piece that drew me to it and I have to say that I'm glad I read this....I don't want to sound like a patronising ass but your poetry has really improved massively, I really like the format of this, you word choice is excellent and rally memorable, as Ben.P stated, the half rhymes were really well thought out and keep the tempo of the poem flowing nicely!!

    Great job!

    Other Ben :)