Comments : The hidden me

  • 9 months ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Em. I cant do anything but nominate.. well done on this. Flows excellently. I guess we are all scared little girls and boys deep down.. well done

    • 9 months ago

      by Em

      Thanks N that means alot :)

  • 9 months ago

    by Brenda

    Em, a very sad honest write. I wish I could wave a wand over you and make your sadness disappear. All I can do is send my love and strength and hugs to you.

    • 9 months ago

      by Em

      Thanks Brenda. Hugs

  • 9 months ago

    by Golden AnGel Rhapsodist

    Em,

    you're writing sad poems again. ..Very true and very sad poem.

    I have things to do thats what I'll say
    so I don't have to rear my weary head today

    ^^^
    that's what you'll say but cannot be done..

    I'm busy in a way you won't understand,
    praying for a ticket to the promised land.
    ^^^
    you want to escape something or someone that's why you want to leave. .I assume

    The nightmares are real, the days are so long
    always questioning where I went wrong.
    ^^^
    Your nightmares chased you even you're awake and it hurt you badly...very nice flow Em

    I carry on regardless with a smile on my face
    hoping soon I will get to an happier place.
    I take a sip of whiskey just to numb the pain,
    it doesn't help even a little, driving me insane.
    ^^^^
    Actually ,drinking sometimes makes everything worst. ..
    It can give another tons of headache and upset stomach. ..that's according to my brother. .but it never lessen the hurt or pain we're encountering. .

    The walking I do makes me thinner but won't heal
    this feeling of darkness that is always too real.
    I take deeper breathes, trying to persevere
    but the torment always seems to reappear.
    The troubles of the past still plague me
    making me the scared little girl you don't see.

    ^^^
    overall a sad and true write. ...

    well done Em

    ..cheer up!

    Gel

  • 9 months ago

    by Kasie

    There is nothing I can say that the others haven't already told you. This is a great piece and I hope soon that you can find your inner peace. Well done on this and I wish you all the best.

    • 9 months ago

      by Em

      Thanks so much

  • 9 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Em,

    Like so many of your writes, a sadness prevails throughout, but - from a selfish reader's point of view - that is offset by some beautiful and fluent rhyming.

    Take care and don't be too fearful of anything!

    Ben

    • 9 months ago

      by Em

      Thanks Ben.

  • 8 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    We love the girl, the lady, the woman you are - we see you, Em, and we love what we see. x

    • 8 months ago

      by Em

      Aww thanks Michael but not a lot of people know the real me. I'm a hard nut to crack haha

  • 4 months ago

    by josep oduor

    I have been inactive lately but your writting is noticable. Good job Em

  • 2 months ago

    by Lucifer

    I can sense feeling of fear in this poem. The girl is running from her past which scares her, even the whiskey isn't helpful because she is not getting any sleep and torment appears again and again. Without a doubt, it is nice piece of work. May I ask one thing why didn't you mention the reason this girl is so scared of her past. What happened when she was little.

  • 1 week ago

    by C J T

    I can feel the sincerity and true emotion in this peice. Enjoyable to read while relatable . Excellence as always.