Comments : Whiskey In The Well (English sonnet)

  • 8 months ago

    by Brenda

    As always Ben, your sonnets are top notch. This one is no exception. Writing can be a blessing and it can be a curse too. Nothing in life is free, it can cost money or our sanity. Agonizing over getting those words just right, torture sometimes. Well done-

    • 8 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Brenda and you are absolutely right.

  • 8 months ago

    by Em

    Ben, yet another fantastic sonnet. I hope one day (with the workshops help) that I can wrote these just as well as you, Michael and Kasie seem to with ease.

    Title - At first I thought this was about drinking way too much than you could handle then I read the poem and realised it wasn't but it did relate to the content well.

    1/ I loved this happening because to me it says words may come easily to some of us and comfort the rest of us they will not make is trust especially when the trust has been so often trampled on making us feel as empty as purse without it's pennies.

    2/ I can totally relate to this as many a poem of mine has taken more courage than anything else and I can imagine with every line written that a shot of whiskey (or any alcohol) is consumed by some of us though I know this isn't about that.. And I totally understand your writes have often made you run up and downstairs finding a pen and paper to write down your thoughts. I also ask myself how many times I need to write about something for it to go away and help me but it never happens.

    3/ Absolute love the imagery here, thats all I have.

    Couplet/ A very powerful ending that to me says don't expect anything if you haven't worked for it.

    Fantastic, Em

    • 8 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Em,

      Thank you so much for this detailed comment. You pretty much have it. Writing can be wonderful, but it can also take a lot out of you, I suppose.

  • 8 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    *mouth drops open, belt unfastens and...*
    ^
    You could say, I liked this a lot! :P

  • 8 months ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Benny,
    As per usual I am the last to see your poem so everyone has already broken it down. Sorry...

    I do love this. :)

    Well done.

  • 8 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Ben, you know I like sonnets, especially your pieces. But, whiskey is something that I have never got to grips with, perhaps, this is a lesson you could teach me?

  • 8 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Issued with buckets from birth - they start off the same, blank and impressionable. It is amazing how just a few years on these buckets then range from tin to gold and drip with substance as varied as brine and caviar.

    Is life fair - I think not.

    • 8 months ago

      by - Mr. Darcy

      oops, wrong poem. This was meant for another gem of yours.

  • 8 months ago

    by SERA

    With pens, we scribble charms that leave us cursed -
    Our words then cut the writer to the bone.
    Do not expect to cast a magic spell
    Without the water leaking from the well.

    For me writing can be the best way to confront and untangle complicated thoughts.
    Once i've articulated them i feel clearer, however getting to that point can sometimes be a draining and frustrating process.

    Great poem!