Comments : Choices (acrostic)

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Michael,

    Here I am, still trying, still trying to prevent the final nail closing on my own coffin and (less dramatically) here I am, still commenting on your marvellous work.
    This poem sums a lot of what's going on up rather nicely, and will receive my nomination tomorrow. It is an entirely relevant piece, considering, and is written excellently. Some things don't change.

    Take care
    Ben

    • 7 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thank you so much, Ben. I have a sonnet about these changes coming up, so maybe you could write one too? You can go to the dark places and express them in ways my pen cannot.

  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Mr D, I like the layout of this piece as like many others it is unique and I think somehow it resembles something though what I am not sure. I tried looking in all directions at it bit to no avail, maybe it was me but it looked like it was meant to. I read and rated this earlier but had to come back and comment as it said I had gone over 2000 words so now I think I will have to go back to school when commenting and word count lol. At first, I wasn't so sure about what the content meant (until Bens comment) then I kind of had a lightbulb moment and went "ohhh yeahhh.."
    1/ Yes, totally agree. Things may have changed but does it really make people want to come back because if I'm honest I haven't seen many people around since all the changes but maybe like me, they couldn't get on at first and got frustrated trying or maybe they just do not like change.
    2/ Love the middle part because to me it was saying will it make or break us as a community. I'm sure we all have put thoughts on that but we shall soon see.
    3/ Battle away i say and more rainbows will come for all us troubled souls.
    I agree, things can only get better, in all aspects.
    Em

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I will take that challenge, Michael, as it may get me writing again

    • 7 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Good man. I look forward to reading and commenting on it. :O)

  • 7 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Well Done Michael,
    but I do disagree.. things cant only get better... :(

  • 7 years ago

    by Phil

    We all have decisions to make but sometimes they may not be right for us what makes them right is learning from the mistakes we make.
    Good one fella.

  • 7 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Freakin awesome.

    "Beseech -
    Each and every
    Troubled soul so that
    Their scrolls may unfold,
    Ensuring this land will impart
    Rainbows of life for our thirsty hearts."

    ^^^^^^^^
    One of the finest stanza i have read in a while.

    That is all.

  • 6 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Hello, Mr. Darcy. What a creative piece this is! Amazing form with a truthful, inspiring content. I am always amazed by forms such as this, and truly in awe of writers who can accomplish both form and content beautifully. Just splendid!