Comments : Blood And Breeze (Bowlesian sonnet)

  • 8 months ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    As always, a thought provoking and clever write from your pen.
    Great imagery in your words Ben as always. I liked this.

  • 8 months ago

    by Em

    Ben, good to see a new piece from you I always feel like the cat who has the cream or the lady who had had her cake and eaten it lol (did you like what I did there?) when I see you have posted something else because it always opens up my brain and claws away at it until I finally think I have cracked the message you are trying to tell haha. Anyway....

    1/ This opening is filled with vivid imagery that I can picture being this person because who doesn't want to be liked regardless of their state of mind. I know sometimes I wish more people gave a damn then realise I am lucky to have the people in my life that do. Her mind and heart here I feel are at loggerheads with one another and the only reason I can think why is love? Hmm, maybe.

    2/ The fact of the matter is, we cannot no matter how we try but we can hold out hope and try anyway because at least then we can't say we didn't even Ig it ends in failure.

    3/ Now, here we have it. She has given way to temptation and ceased her life because of it and now that river ebbs for her as she wanted it to anyway. I know there's probably a deeper meaning to this but this is what I got.

    Couplet/ This ending is rather powerful and the image within amazing. My first thought was that this person self loathes so much that even the iron net surrounding her is killed off trying to get through to her that she is far from what she thinks of herself and that somewhere, someone is searching for a lady just like her. Please correct me if I am wrong lol.

    Tale care.
    Em

    • 8 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Em. I suppose it's just about someone lacking in self confidence and needing attention because of the that, but in the end, some people need more than a temporary fix.

  • 8 months ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Good God man you've excelled yourself here!!!!

    i'm at work having a sneaky read so i will return to comment properly.....bloody hell fella....AMAZING write right here!

  • 8 months ago

    by Brenda

    The sonnet king rises again-Ben, this is just beautiful!

  • 6 months ago

    by Meena Krish

    Interesting...I've never heard of this Sonnet before perhaps should
    give it a try and always you rise up with these Sonnets...I agree with Brenda
    a Sonnet king indeed!