Ho, I must say I liked the snappy lines in this because it makes it feel like the anger inside coming out or the anxiety as usually they come together with bad days though I will have to say because the last two stanzas were a different rhyme scheme I stumbled on then a little though have no suggestions for these... Though thinking about it maybe its a good thong because it shows on these bad days we can change drastically in our moods.

Well done,
Em

very impressive poem.

I love this, Ren. As sad as the content is, there is a sort of inspiration to the last few lines. By grabbing a pen and creating something - even if it's carved from granite - means there is something to chase at rainbow's end!
A very good vent indeed!

Take care,

Ben

Well versed, well rhymed, well done!
It gets better, with lessons learned.

#Hoping you find solace in peace.

Powerful peice Ren,always good to grab a pen :)

I absolutely love the way you write this. I've read it over and over again!

Nani

i double posted sorry

I like the message, the poem is nice. Its just i have read (and written) many poems like this. I'm not a huge fan of the rhyme scheme with short lines. But i kept reading. The poem has good content and i enjoyed my read. Just sharing my thoughts and constructive crit

Reminds me of the short answers you would actually give when you're feeling like this. I know when my temper flares I tend to say a lot more with less.