I liked the layout and the satisfying conclusion - ... with my anchor, all is well. Using this hymn title to inspire your own poem is a thoroughly good way to find those words when rehashing older pieces. Great job!
Britt, I only comment on poems that touch me. Reading this I could feel that it had come from deep within. You know I don't have a religious bone in my body but still respect those that do. I could feel the strength of your conviction resonate though this from start to finish. A lovely read. Good luck with your continuing journey.
I just came across this poem while listening to Kristene Dimarco’s song that was inspired by this hymn. I took it as a sign that I should comment. It’s been a long while since I have broken down a poem, I do hope that it’s okay for me to do so with yours.
““It is well.. with my soul..."
Familiar lyrics hum along in my heart;
I sink into them, unpacking the verses one line at a time
and realize how much unpacking there is left to do.”
^ This feeling, the feeling of lyrics triggering memories that are kept deep inside is a fascinating sensation. I love your use of the word “hum” to describe the way you feel the lyrics in your heart, that out of all the words you could have chosen hum expresses that you feel them physically as well as emotionally and spiritually (your being, entirely); also “unpacking” to describe what has and what needs to happen inside of you… We often don’t realize that we have so much more to go through and ‘unpack’ until something triggers it. It’s hard to be hit with the realization that more growth needs to happen because growth is a painful process that involves rehashing things that have already been moved passed.
“Rehearsing, rehashing, revisiting old pieces of myself
that was done away with long ago,
and yet they're here,
everywhere yet nowhere.”
^ This stanza expresses a lot of feels. It seems like you are overwhelmed, anxious, and suffocated in the moment. That you are trying to stay calm and not allow those feelings to take over even though they are being shoved in your face. It feels like an anxiety attack waiting to happen.
“My last journey proves this unpacking tailspins my soul,
but with my anchor,
it is well.”
^ I love this ending. Throughout chaos He is your anchor. That’s a brave stance to take and you should feel proud of that. It expresses that in this moment you are chaotic and twirly, but also, you are okay because He is holding you and you are letting Him. I think it’s really cool how you have used the hymn as inspiration for a poem based on personal experience. I don’t see too many poems like this that feel personal.
A good poem, in my opinion, is one that has been written to process through emotions or situations. And this feels like that. I’m glad that it’s been nominated.
This is probably one of the best comments I have ever received. This is pure gold to my heart. You nailed it, 100%! I don't write often about my faith, and I wish I could more. I love that song and listen to it at least 5 times a day. Love the reworking of old hymns. I'm also listening to this amazing sermon series about our souls, and how we must anchor ourselves to Jesus rather than broken souls or things that have no soul. Lots of unpacking and growth in the process, which is beautiful and terrifying all at once. Jesus tells us we will be pruned, and the beauty in that comes from being attached to the vine.