Distortion

by Brenda   Mar 4, 2017


I feel awkward
at times-
So uncomfortable
in my own skin,
I wish at times
I could just fold up,
origami like,
turn into a butterfly,
and flutter away-
But butterflies are pretty
aren't they?
Sometimes,
looking in the mirror,
I feel like
I'm at a fun house.
Distorted views
is all I see-
Everything wrong, every imperfection
made glaringly clear,
reflected in those mirrors-
Why do I always see
the negative?
Really, almost fascinated
with the distorted-
Why?

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  • 1 year ago

    by Beautiful Tragedy

    Loved this Brenda. You really did a good job of penning this one out. 5/5

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you, I really appreciate your kind comments

  • 1 year ago

    by Hope

    Great poem, very well put and I get it.

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much. We are our own worse enemy.

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Fan bloody tastic Brenda!!!
    Hugs x

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Awww, thank you Em! I appreciate you-hugs girl-

  • 1 year ago

    by Everlasting

    Hi Brenda, I am just going to write what came to my mind while reading your poem. Forgive me if it doesn't make sense.

    "
    Fold up... like origami?

    So basically, you'll have to be like a piece of paper. You'll have to learn to be flexible so that you can fold yourself the way you want to be, while at the same time, remain unbreakable. If the paper is not flexible and strong, it can break. Or if it's too thick (headed) it might be too hard to fold it... and experience the desirable change.

    It's interesting how your poem alludes to change.
    Its specially in reference to the changes that have already happened and that have led to the imperfections. Imperfections that are not the desireable ones. These changes were not done by us consciously so realizing they took place, takes us by surprise and it's hard to get used to them. So the way to deal with them, it's through going to a conscious change. I guess is easier to accept changes when we are conscious that they will take place.

    So basically, a question that popped into mind, what's stopping you from folding yourself up like origami like"?

    well done. An enjoyable read.

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Deep thoughts in your comments. I appreciate these a lot. I guess as woman we tend to look at the negative vs the fact we earned those "flaws" fair and square. What we see and what others see are two different things.

  • 1 year ago

    by BlueJay

    I feel like this is a piece most people, if not especially writers, can relate to at multiple points in their life and that is a great quality for poetry to have. I also agree with Naughtymouse that your use of word choice and structure were extremely powerful.

    Nice piece! Great use of a question at the end!

    • 1 year ago

      by Brenda

      Thank you so much, I really appreciate your comments and thoughts.

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