Comments : To Melt

  • 9 months ago

    by Maple Tree

    I lost my tipples!

    Flipping beautiful!

    • 9 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Have they frozen off, Maple or simply melted? lol

  • 9 months ago

    by Brenda

    Ben, wow Oh wow! This is amazing! Dang it Andrea, you beat me to it, lol!

  • 9 months ago

    by Em

    Ben, your words always make me speechless even if I do write a long comment lol. Though this is a free verse and you're not 100% on writing them, you always do a fantastic job and this is no different.
    The first stanza is image filled and a wonderful one at that.. I imagine this (please forgive me I couldn't get my brain to think of another word) weak man standing at the edge of this snow covered mountain as a cry for help, for love and then it comes to him and his heart slowly thaws this down the mountain it goes thawing the ice too. I'm letting my imagination run away with me....
    Anyway, here it is the love you have been waiting for that thawed your heart, maybe it was her beauty or you looked inside and had a surprise that not all women are b itches lol (I jest) and she waits for you, she loves you and she laps up all the hurting you have been through and you begin to trust her even if little by little until finally she takes all the hurt away by eating it up so to speak and what is love if they cannot take you at your worse?

    I am probably way off but hey ho, my interpretation lol..

    I am back!!!! Haha

    Take care, Em

  • 9 months ago

    by DarkLight

    Beautiful piece, Ben.
    Keep going on.

  • 9 months ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Firstly, I'd like to simply call you a poetry freak. Ben this is such an inspiring write, LOVE the alliteration here, i find it very powerful and striking when read aloud, the imagery here is awesome too, you can almost feel your temperature drop as you read it, with Her waiting like a huntress for the last of your emotions and feeling to be devoured like a vulture circling.

    It's no secret i'm and avid reader of yours and as much as i love your rhyming i love your free verse too so well done Syrup for nominating cause if she didn't then i totally would ( if i had some left hahaha)

  • 9 months ago

    by CJ Maleney

    As someone who spends most of his free time on rivers and lakes this appeals to me on more than one level,

    Fantastic work

  • 9 months ago

    by Ren

    "Mountains copiously capped with
    veneers of snowy wonderment"...

    -Pauses. Takes a moment.-

    Whew...forgot to remind myself this is a BEN I need to be prepared!

    -Takes a deep breath...and starts over.-

    My thoughts reflect most of what everyone has already kicking butt and being the amazing writer that you are! This poem is just absolutely lovely and the imagery is breathtaking!

    Take care!

  • Fantastic work love it!

  • 4 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Beautiful, Ben.

  • 4 months ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Benny - amazing as always