OK it's long and doesn't flow perfectly but it was fun to play with this

Though this piece is a little bit on the lengthy side, I understand you were probably just getting it out of your system, and that's one of the amazing things poetry offers us. Believe me, I've had my fair share of long, poorly flowing, formatted with insanity pieces, but this one still speaks to me. It has a very specific word choice and that speaks volumes to me. Both about you and your works. Again, the rhymes were... odd but they were not terribly horrific - they simply felt required in your mind (at least that's what I'm guessing).

I think if you ever felt like editing this or rewriting the idea, you could have an extremely profound write, but for now this one was simply interesting.