The Room

by ddavidd   Apr 17, 2017


The cat
was portioning the poses of laziness.
The clock
was proportioning
the tick tock dichotomy of its palpitation
in the room.
The whispering drone of an unsettling kettle
was melting the throat
of the see-through reveries of the teacups.

The bottled wine
on the rack,
satiated and replete,
leashed to its cork,
was lashing the thirst of wine glasses.

My phantom
like the echoes of water on the ceiling
were waltzing
with the swollen yields
of chandelier's spectrums,

and
the plant
was aroused
by the slit of the curtains
while its blooms
were opening
to the obtruding rays
of the daylight.

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  • 5 months ago

    by Nicko

    judging comment

    I was enchanted by this poem on first read, after the third or fourth reading I knew it was in my top three. In your previous comments painting and surreal were mentioned, surreal is what jumps out at me, an old worldly painting almost, capturing moments forever that a photo never could. I like that you have inserted yourself within this image in the third stanza but what won me over the most is the seductive last stanza, it hit me between the eyes. Great finish to great read.

  • 6 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Vivid descriptions...I love how even the cats are positioned right there! Everything in the room is so alive, thanks to your great choice of words.

  • 7 months ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Really love this Frank, you use great control with the structure of this write and your word choice is spot on, very vivid visuals that just "pop" in to the readers head immediately.

    Wonderful writing

    Ben

    • 7 months ago

      by ddavidd

      Thank you so much Ben I am glad you think this way.

  • 7 months ago

    by Meena Krish

    The room has some view it just appeared in my mind as
    I read it..I liked how you positioned each object giving it time
    and space and taking time to describe it. Yes somewhat a painting
    of "The Room"...nice!

    • 7 months ago

      by ddavidd

      thanks dear Meena for seeing that surreal painting.

  • 8 months ago

    by pmmurphy

    This reads like a poem that is simply beautiful. It feels like your describing a scenerary to me.

    • 8 months ago

      by ddavidd

      It somehow is dear pmmurphy. Thank you for the compliment.

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