Comments : Glowing embers

  • 6 years ago

    by Jamie

    I really like the meaning behind this poem. It seems to be a self reflection of the past and present. Which i think most poets can relate to. I enjoyed the word usage here as well as it fits well with each line. I don't know if a lot of people would think the word embers would work where it does, but i do. Because you are explaining the fires that have burnt from you. I like the questions at the end too, because you leave the reader thinking about what you will do. A cliffhanger of sorts, because i believe only each person can know how to live their own life. Great write!

  • 6 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    This is a nice reflective piece that is true for most women at some point in their lives. I like to think that the spark never dies but that as we grow older we need to fan it sometimes - have a blaze then let it rest for a while. Milly x

  • 6 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    This coupled with 'Can We' builds that story even further, shining more light on that past, that history.

    The first four lines all not only are about the past, but start with the past 'Used', 'Used', 'Used' like a drum, each 'Used' growing in size. Then the flatness of 'Lived' - the first word still focused on the past. The end of each line full of life and joy; 'vibrant', 'fun', 'vivacious', 'fullest'.

    The next two lines are about the present. I can feel a break there as the memory gives way to present. I see a concaved chest and forward hunched shoulders "Now I am nothing". And then there is a quick last-moment hark back to the past with "Of what I used to be". I think it's that quick sprint from present day to down memory lane that makes you/the character, question the future. As if asking themselves how they came from who they were, to who they've become.

    Then comes the question that all face: "How do I find my light". How do I make my future better than my present? How do I make it even better than my past?

    I don't know if you thought about your piece quite a in-depth as I've just gone through it, but that's the great thing about the creative world: sometimes - often, in fact - our audiences find things that we never even knew were there. I personally discovered my while writing my thoughts about it than when I read it a face value because I was really thinking about it. It was an interesting experiences for me, and an interesting poem, so thank you.