Comments : Wishes And Craters

  • 8 months ago

    by Ben

    Ben,

    This is amazing, i'm not even going to comment other than to say I hear you.

    Ben

  • 8 months ago

    by Phil

    Another amazing write Mr Pickard. In 'stanza' 2 is know meant to be no.. just curious in case I read it wrong

    • 8 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Phil - thanks for pointing out that schoolboy error.

  • 8 months ago

    by Poetess

    I wish I could have extra nominations. Also, I wonder if anyone else is amused by the double Bens or if it's just me.. lol

    • 8 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      I know, there should only be one of us, lol. Mind you, Ben isn't an uncommon name, I suppose, so we will just have to share...

    • 7 months ago

      by ddavidd

      I think we should have more Bens, they are wonderful.

  • 8 months ago

    by Meena Krish

    A moving write yet its tenderly penned with the emotions
    truly felt. I also like how you have laid out the stanzas for they make
    an image...nicely done...take care

  • 7 months ago

    by AngelaLuisaCory

    Beautifully written, beautifully presented, which just adds to the entire piece. I remain your biggest fan. M. X

  • 7 months ago

    by ddavidd

    It is so sad . Even though so personal, yet the reader cannot evade the share feeling.
    Strong structure as usual.

  • 7 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Thank you, Frank, that certainly means a lot to this Ben.

  • 7 months ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    okay firstly.. WOW.. the layout and the way it reads amazing (As always!)
    it seems you keep blowing my mind away with ever new piece of yours I read good sir..

    secondly - i was reading through other comments and I noticed your mum commented?!
    IF so - that is so amazing and cute.!!!

  • 7 months ago

    by Em

    Ben, I will apologise for missing this one (I obviously have a backlog to catch up on but right now I'm feeling rather lazy to do so) as you know I've been away anyway so not fear as Ems now here haha.. you have a real knack for any form of poetry and this is one of those well all you poetry is. I am glad you found this site and can share your wonderful work with us. So you know I will split up the work using the fullstops apart from the first one so you know where I'm at lol

    Firstly the title was rather intriguing and I cannot figure it out but don't worry it's perfect as I know you well

    1/ What a fascinating opening. You state you've wished for more than this and it makes you wonder exactly what 'this' is... Is it love, friendship or so you just fancy more than a maccies on a Saturday night (kidding of course) then you go on to tell us this gruesome yet awesome dream to have of not wanting to meet you maker by your insides falling out basically but ho you say this is magical and none to us want to perish before out times or as the beast before the last row petal falls, I like that part as is does remind me of beauty and the beast.

    2/ The imagery here is astounding. Hey sands a bit tch though as it hurts like hell and I know it's not literal but I bet grown men would blame sand particles being in their eyes when they're teary so they don't look/feel less manly. Love the word lacerated.

    3/ This is real deep because it shows how empowering the darkness actually is and it is because once we've bathed in darkness it's hard to wash it away again?.

    4/ I like this part because I can imagine you raising your hand, pointing your finger and saying in the calmest of voices "and you" in a accusative way lol but yes I agree we do kiss others without acknowledging exactly where they've been and with whom we just kiss becasue it's good and satisfies the feelings of loneliness, in my opinion but as long as it hurts no one who cares

    5/ love the ending because it says you've wished once and you'll wish again no doubt more than once.
    Em

    • 7 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thanks for the wonderful comment, Em

  • 7 months ago

    by Maher

    Mr Pickard! How dare you amaze the internet with your wonderful words of poetry! How very dare you make me love the structure of this piece, where the layout of the words tell as much of the story as the deep and exquisitely real meanings they carry! And most of all, how dare you make me click that 'Like' button many times, knowing in all frustration that it'll only give you 1 damn Like!!

    Really, a great piece of work good Sir, as always. Thank you for sharing it with us all.

    May only the best be your company, wherever you may go :)

  • 7 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Okay, Ben, I am getting the same reaction as Maher but I will try to calm down. Actually, I'd like to ask the same how dare you thing! :-) This piece took me deep, deep, deep into the recesses of the heart that is wishing...and wishing...and I feel that longing so much. The pang of that heart...kills me.

    • 7 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, everyone. All the best. And Maher - that is one of the most amusing comments I have ever had the fortune of venturing across!