Beautiful, Maddy - genuinely.
To be honest (and I know this is a personal thing) I'm not sure if I find the line breaks distracting or not. I've experimented with a few of those myself and never been convinced either way! They certainly go a long way to make writing more 'palatable' as I know blocks of writing can be daunting to some readers.
Anyway, as above, lovely stuff. Take care,