A View To Make The Snow Melt (tanka)

by Ben Pickard   May 29, 2017


~ ~ ~

I have viewed the world
atop crispy white mountains,
and been drenched in views
of wonder, but your naked
beauty surpasses it all.

~ ~ ~

Ben Pickard 2017

* A tanka is a Japanese form and consists of five lines with a 5 7 5 7 7 syllable count. They usually deal with love.

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  • 4 months ago

    by Tony

    Beautiful poem.

    After "diving" into these comments, the "Bens" have given me "the bends"

    • 4 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      lol, Tony. Thank you, good man.

  • 4 months ago

    by Em

    Wow wow wow I am speechless and Naomi that commented I nearly choked on my food haha

  • 4 months ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    okay - unrelated to the poem (Sorry Ben), but does anyone chuckle at Ben talking to Ben?!
    I imagine Benny sitting there with his PC open and his Ipad or Laptop open just commenting back and forth then saying to himself out loud "congratulations on the funny comment Ben"... Like all this time its just the one Ben!

    - Obviously its not but it was just a funny passing thought I had seeing Ben and Ben...

    • 4 months ago

      by Ren

      Hahaha this is awesome...yes I definitely find myself giggling at the Ben's and their comments lol

    • 4 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Naomi, you have me clocked...and I was having such fun!

    • 4 months ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      haha !! Sorry Em for making you nearly choke!! and sorry Benny (and Ben) for spilling the beans :P

  • 4 months ago

    by Ben

    Ben,

    you make me sick, added to favs to perv over later.

    Ben

    • 4 months ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Ben, your comments have cheered me immensely this morning, so thank you, lol

    • 4 months ago

      by Ren

      Ben's comment...lol

  • 4 months ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Love this Benny.. :) Well done

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