Comments : Sleep with me Tonight

  • 6 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Welcome to the site.

    I love rhyming poetry and it's so nice to see new members posting it with such obvious quality.

    Take care and all the best,

    Ben

    • 6 months ago

      by Alec

      Thank you as well. I liked the sonnet you recently wrote. I've always thought 10 syllables was too much space between rhyme so I steer clear of iambic pantameter. You however have a flare for it.

  • 6 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I agree to some extent. Most of my rhyming poetry is written in iambic tetrameter, but I love trying my hand at sonnets.
    Anyway, many thanks.

  • 6 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Hi. Welcome to the site. This was a great read. I love your rhyming and this poem is so sexy. Great piece.

  • 6 months ago

    by Tony

    All jokes aside this is amazing. You paint a perfect picture and rhyme flawlessly. Any ideas on the collab?

    • 6 months ago

      by Alec

      We could just argue in rhyme, and play rock paper scissors to see who gets to post it??? I enjoyed calling you a hopeless romantic. It was a fun way to pass the time as I ate my cereal...
      ~Alec

    • 6 months ago

      by Tony

      Smart Alec,

      Why am I not surprised you eat cereal for breakfast?

    • 6 months ago

      by Alec

      Alexander. Mom called me smart alec growing up. Eventually got shortened to Alec.

  • 6 months ago

    by Ren

    I agree, this is a very well written and sexy write- amazing work!

  • 6 months ago

    by Ben

    Welcome to PnQ and you certainly kick the effing door in with this write, structure and word choice are spot on and this flows like a mo'fo.

    Great Job.

    Ben

    • 6 months ago

      by Alec

      Lol, thanks bro. Thats the plan.

  • 6 months ago

    by Alec

    Should have posted this earlier, "Duerme conmigo mi amor" translates to "sleep with me my love."

  • 6 months ago

    by AngelaLuisaCory

    Well done. I knew what the Spanish phrase means! Welcome to this site. Beautifully written, sexy and evocative. I really enjoyed reading this.

  • 6 months ago

    by Em

    This was written well with fluent rhyming... Hey but you know that already right?? I am blown away by your work and the fact that you write it so elegantly !!

    Em

    • 6 months ago

      by Alec

      But its always nice to hear from someone else ; )

      Thank you. Its always my goal to tell a story or make a point in my writing. I don't use complicated metaphors or similies because they tend to get lost in translation. I stick to the literal. And of course, I love consonence, rhythm, and rhyme.

  • 1 month ago

    by Brise

    Again so beautiful! I'm seduced by your words!