Comments : A breathe of fresh air

  • 4 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Ahhh. I suddenly wanted to cry. This was such a painful piece. The structure was great, but I am deeply affected by the content. It was romantic but very sad.

    • 4 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you mossgirl,

      Yes sadness can come from beauty. Expressing feelings is what brings a piece together in its entirety :)

  • 4 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    The wind came whispering; purring
    empathy into my ears

    ^^

    Michael, the whole poem is wonderful but that line is sublime.

    All the best

    • 4 months ago

      by Michael

      Thanks Ben, as always truly, lovely comments :)

  • 4 months ago

    by Em

    Michael again I am left speechless!

    • 4 months ago

      by Michael

      Arrh... Thank you Em :) x

  • 4 months ago

    by Brenda

    Wow Michael, so much sadness and melancholy, but also this feeling of completeness when your lost love came to visit you on the nighttime breezes. Beautifully penned.

    • 4 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Brenda for your lovely comments.
      And yes all what you mention are within the contents :)

  • 4 months ago

    by Ren

    WOW!!! MICHAEL!!

    This is such a beautifully written and awe inspiring write!! The imagery and word choice are superb!!

    "The wind came whispering; purring
    empathy into my ears
    of my shared sorrow.
    Cordial swirls comforted,
    Soothing my solitude.
    Caressing my madness."

    Oh I have chills!!! Fantastic!!!

    • 4 months ago

      by Michael

      Ren,

      As always your words are so inspiring and lovely :)
      Thank you

  • 4 months ago

    by Hope

    I feel the fantasy and lonesomeness in this poem, great job!

    • 4 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Hope for your lovely words :)

  • 4 months ago

    by Maple Tree

    Sighs.... beautiful!

    Congratulations my friend!

    • 4 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Andrea
      Your words always mean lots to me
      :)

  • 4 months ago

    by Em

    Congratulations on your win.

    • 4 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Em :)

  • 4 months ago

    by Ren

    Congrats Michael!! :)

    • 4 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you kindly Ren :)

  • 4 months ago

    by Brenda

    Congratulations Michael on your win! These really was beautiful-

  • 4 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Congrats on your win, Michael.

    • 4 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you kindly Miss M :)

  • 4 months ago

    by CJ Maleney

    Congratulations dude this is a fantastic piece of work

    Craig

  • 4 months ago

    by Michael

    Howdy dudie ;0

    thanks fella, nice words

  • 4 months ago

    by Meena Krish

    A breath of fresh air has so much sadness and pain.
    The words are so soothing to read and then move from one verse
    to the other smoothly making it such a lovely read but within this
    sadness lives and breathes...touching write.

    Congrats on the Win!

    • 4 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Meena, your words are kindly received and yes you are right :)

  • 4 months ago

    by gopi nath

    Super lines

    • 4 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you gopi for you kind words :)

  • 3 months ago

    by Nicko

    Judging comment

    A romantic poem of yearning extremely well penned. To my mind you are becoming one of the more accomplished poets on this site. Your use and knowledge of the English language is evident to all. There is good imagery, stanza’s are well constructed and contain some great lines. The use of “twitched” in the second stanza comes to mind, loved that!