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  • 6 months ago

    by Em

    This is very deep

    • 6 months ago

      by Aegis

      Thanks:/ The inspiration behind it is nearly two decades of creating my own life without the help of my biological mother. She chose drugs and alcohol over motherhood when I was very young, which ultimately lead up to her own untimely death. She had become a stranger to me with almost no contact over 17 years. When I found out about her death I didn't know what to feel. Honestly, I still don't. Today is the anniversary of her passing, and this is the first time I've ever written about her. I figured the title was apropos, considering the lack of her presence in my life and the uncertainty of my feelings about it.

    • 6 months ago

      by Em

      This makes so much more sense reading your comment to. Your words are always so beautiful though regardless of the topic.

  • 6 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    I feel so sorry after reading the poem and the story behind it. The poem is beautiful. The wondering at the end is so raw and honest. I believe that you have blossomed in both ways.

  • 6 months ago

    by Ren

    I agree. This poem is extremely deep and incredibly sad, full of such a sorrowful uncertainty, and written so beautifully. Well done, and much love and peace to you!

  • 6 months ago

    by beyouplur

    How could you go on?
    Your abandoned aching soul is so damn beautiful..
    Shine on and blossom from within :)

  • 5 months ago

    by Thomas

    Judging comment:

    "“I was an abandoned marigold”
    Just this starting line: beautiful in its spaciousness, its ability to present such a vast expansive world, a flower alone in a field. This really drew me in and held me prisoner, needing to read more.

    “Promethean.”
    A line of just a single word, much like the marigold, abandoned to live by itself within the poem. And quite an interesting choice of comparison here - Promethean, being especially creative, innovative even, and Prometheus, the fire thief, here as the marigold without a sun.

    And that ending - “I wonder… or because of you” so dazzlingly closes the piece with the inquiry of whether the narrator has sprouted from “you” or in the course of having known “you”. A beautifully crafted, thoughtful write."

  • 5 months ago

    by Meena Krish

    Judging Comment:

    “…and I wonder if I have blossomed from you, or because of
    you” A lingering question which has taken me deep into this
    write. From start to end there is sadness definitely yet in
    certain parts it feels like the author is best without this person
    and at the same time what it would be like if that person had
    given some of her time to him. Lonely and sad prevailing feel throughout this write…touching.