Comments : The Science of Deduction

  • 3 months ago

    by hiraeth

    I wasn't expecting the ending! Glad to see you conquered your writer's block :)

  • 3 months ago

    by Michael

    Miss Mel..... Holmes? haha
    a sleuth in the making, maybe..

    Wonderful story, and great rhyming, well done

    Much love

    Michael :)

    • 3 months ago

      by mossgirl19

      Thank you so very much, Michael! And much love to you too! :-)

  • 3 months ago

    by Ren

    Breaking out of that writer's block with a BANG! Dear Lady, this is excellent!! :) <3

    • 3 months ago

      by mossgirl19

      Haha! Oh my, Cowgirl! You are indeed my number one supporter! Love you always.

  • 3 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Writer's block? Never! Excellent story and thoroughly original, Mel.

    All the best

  • 3 months ago

    by Em

    And here we have ms mg out of writers block and into some amazing poetry.. kerrrrching!!!

    • 3 months ago

      by mossgirl19

      Haha, Em! Thank you, Duchinggg...

  • 3 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Loved this piece it's brilliant- writers block has inspired you x

    • 3 months ago

      by mossgirl19

      Milly! Thank you for an inspiring comment!

  • 3 months ago

    by Lvi

    Mel,the way you narrate the events is amazing.
    Enjoyed reading this great piece. :)

    • 3 months ago

      by mossgirl19

      Aww, thank you Lvi. I do narrate a lot. :-)

  • 2 months ago

    by Bradley Peter

    The story was intriguing, but I feel the rhythm was marred by it. It struggled at times, I think. Particularly in the eighth stanza:
    The man sourly grinned, “Aha! So, that’s all you see?
    You are but wasting my precious time!”
    But he added, “Well, no, I see some curious things actually
    And I hope I’m not out of the line.”

    I personally feel that the first and third lines were perhaps a tad too long.

    But I certainly applaud your storytelling. This poem was a mystery I was eager to have revealed.