I wasn't expecting the ending! Glad to see you conquered your writer's block :)

Miss Mel..... Holmes? haha
a sleuth in the making, maybe..

Wonderful story, and great rhyming, well done

Much love

Michael :)

Breaking out of that writer's block with a BANG! Dear Lady, this is excellent!! :) <3

Writer's block? Never! Excellent story and thoroughly original, Mel.

All the best

And here we have ms mg out of writers block and into some amazing poetry.. kerrrrching!!!

Loved this piece it's brilliant- writers block has inspired you x

Mel,the way you narrate the events is amazing.
Enjoyed reading this great piece. :)

The story was intriguing, but I feel the rhythm was marred by it. It struggled at times, I think. Particularly in the eighth stanza:
The man sourly grinned, “Aha! So, that’s all you see?
You are but wasting my precious time!”
But he added, “Well, no, I see some curious things actually
And I hope I’m not out of the line.”

I personally feel that the first and third lines were perhaps a tad too long.

But I certainly applaud your storytelling. This poem was a mystery I was eager to have revealed.