Comments : Too Dark Out There (senryu)

  • 5 days ago

    by Hope

    I understand the mystery of this.....the darkness seems brighter.

  • 5 days ago

    by mossgirl19

    Ben, I think of my room! It is indeed so much brighter and so much safer inside. If I have a choice I don't want to leave its four walls. :-)

    I have to agree it is indeed a tragic reality. A lovely write, Ben and one so relatable.

  • 5 days ago

    by Em

    Ben.. now this is what I'm talking about (lol) I totally get this and though I am petrified of the dark for reasons not many people understand it brings a much better comfort than having to open up the curtains, the door and even ourselves to the world and people around us or even better than having to go out and face the stupidity of the world we now live in.. social anxiety (well any anxiety) is a beeeeeeeep!!

    Very clever Mr Pickard.

    Em

  • 5 days ago

    by Jamie

    Instantly added to my favorites. If no one nominates this tomorrow before i can i will.

    Holy crap Ben. The metaphor is perfect here. Love the title so much because it could mean so many things. You don't really know until you read the poem itself. In my mind it could be the world, or the title could mean through the eyes of a child talking about the place they live, depression etc. Then you get to the poem..

    And to me you are talking about the world outside metaphorically. There is not a lot of imagery per se, but me being me i can see someone who is living with anxiety and or depression closing the curtains and feel that sigh of relief wash through their body. It really is a great metaphor because the world we live in now is very dark. And we all have to protect ourselves and be our own light.

    Well done

    • 4 days ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Exactly, Jamie. Many thanks for your time.

  • 5 days ago

    by Michael

    Very, very clever Ben. Nothing else to say :)

    Michael

  • 5 days ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Benny - em has broken this to pieces before anyone could get in. Well done..

  • 5 days ago

    by Maher

    I don't even like senryus but this is great. I'd say more, but I'd just be repeating what others have already commented and I don't want to be 'that guy'. Nice one, Mr Pickard. Thanks for sharing :)

  • 3 days ago

    by Jamie

    Officially nominated!

  • 1 day ago

    by Ren

    (<3) just gonna drop a few of these here...