First off, I would just like to state that I absolutely love the title of this piece. I think it's great. It's the reason why I clicked this poem.
I could sense a great depth and emotion in this piece, but if I'm begin completely honest - which I shall apologise for now since it's going to fall under the category of 'constructive criticism' - the depth and emotion was - for me - heavily hindered by the structure of the lines. I feel that a lot of the lines weren't completed, giving the piece a confused and disjointed rhythm.
4 months ago
Wonderful start and beautiful ending.
the ocean remains the same despite
swallowing unsaid goodbyes whole.