I liked it, but - and I don't know if you were working to a set-syllable frame - but I think it would've perhaps been stronger if the 'as' from the second line was placed at the start of the third, and the same with the 'and' from the fourth to the fifth. It's probably more to do with me than your work, but I thought they'd be stronger line endings.
The content was simple and sweet. It was endearing and honest with a beautiful sense of vulnerability. For some unknown reason, I pictured her in a big train station in the 1930s: surrounded, but alone