Comments : Sweet one

  • 2 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Cute and sweet, Duchess.

  • 2 months ago

    by Michael

    Hey Miss Em
    Lovely piece from you

    Much warmth

    Michael

  • 2 months ago

    by Bradley Peter

    I liked it, but - and I don't know if you were working to a set-syllable frame - but I think it would've perhaps been stronger if the 'as' from the second line was placed at the start of the third, and the same with the 'and' from the fourth to the fifth. It's probably more to do with me than your work, but I thought they'd be stronger line endings.

    The content was simple and sweet. It was endearing and honest with a beautiful sense of vulnerability. For some unknown reason, I pictured her in a big train station in the 1930s: surrounded, but alone

    • 2 months ago

      by Em

      Thanks all and Bradley thanks on the honest comment

  • 2 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Em, good to return to the site after a week away and see that you are still turning out these great little acrostics.
    Well done and all the best as ever,
    Ben