(Dedicated to friends who'll say..'I do' once more)
(and together take their love, enjoy and explore.)
Our love; unveiled when dating in the dark.
We knew this way of searching was a chance;
but soon our eyes were fluttering a spark,
which spun unto a wonderful romance.
Our day has come to tie our sacred knot
The strings we’ve laced to bind our hearts as one.
What lies within our pasts are now forgot;
for now we look for better things to come.
Our love is blessed with bands of golden rings;
We breathed from lips our vows of solemn words
We’ll keep each other safe beneath our wings
and will enjoy our lives as free as birds
We may have borrowed; something old and blue;
But cherish life; in love of pastures new
Michael , I think in the 5th line it is sacred instead of scared, please correct it if I am right.
This is the thing with love. I mean it happens to you and you find that one person in the billions made only for you.
I think you got lucky to have her in your life as your wife. As in love this happens very rarely that the person you love, loves you back.
A very strong piece of writing. Every line was important and giving new information, and not simply regurgitating a previous line in a different way to make a rhyme work. I also enjoyed your use of the English language, too: simple but varied.
7 months ago
by Ben Pickard
Michael, I have been away for a week, only to return to you writing flawless sonnets. You have it with this one, good fellow. The meter, syllables, rhyme, everything - spot on. It's poetry like this that keeps me coming back to the site.
All the very best as ever,