another recycled poem about vulnerability

by hiraeth   Aug 19, 2017


i know that
your heart is tender
to the touch,
skin bruised,
scars-a-plenty;
you let your rainclouds
brood into hurricanes.
and when that isn’t enough,
you dig deep
into your nest and sleep
under a bush of thorns -
jagged edges
sharpened on teeth,
words swallowed
(like rocks).

i know that
your wounds can’t be
stitched together
with sincerity
and well-meaning
words,
or a salve made
from crystalized
words dripped in
honey;
time will lick it shut
with salted tongue while
you plant wildflowers
in your wound,
effusing pain into beauty.

i know
what it means to be lonely,
landlocked with no seas
to traverse to feel momentarily
helpless
(willingly this time),
but the sea still foams,
salivating at the thought of
embracing you.

i know
what it’s like to be you.

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  • 5 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    I agree with previous sentiments this should have been nominated. Wonderful imagery and thought provoking emotion. MIlly x

  • 5 months ago

    by Lucifer

    Seriously senyru, I don't know how you do this but it's some other level of poetry.

    If I were you, I would have chosen poetry as my profession.

    And I am shocked why no one nominated this.

    I was going to say that first stanza is good, then I read the second one and I thought I would choose this it was better, but finally I read the third stanza and it was the best.

    This is what you do with your every poem.

    You start from good, move to better and end on its best.

    You are brilliant.

  • 6 months ago

    by Sai

    The third stanza and final lines are so good. I like the concept of being "...lonely, / landlocked with no seas". It stood out to me the most because when I think about the sea, it could be quite frightening at least when you find yourself lost in it I think that I'd rather be "lonely". From a distance, I do think it a magnificent sight. I guess my point here is that you can take these poetry terms that are so overused in contemporary poetry and put them in a fresh and different light. I mean I sort of understand where the speaker is coming from, that they'd rather "feel momentarily / helpless" than the loneliness that has become sort of like routine in their life (I'm picturing an endless desert, in contrast to the sea image) but at the same time they haven't gotten used to it, the loneliness still weighs them down.

  • 6 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Thank you for sharing my sentiments. :-)

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