The third stanza and final lines are so good. I like the concept of being "...lonely, / landlocked with no seas". It stood out to me the most because when I think about the sea, it could be quite frightening at least when you find yourself lost in it I think that I'd rather be "lonely". From a distance, I do think it a magnificent sight. I guess my point here is that you can take these poetry terms that are so overused in contemporary poetry and put them in a fresh and different light. I mean I sort of understand where the speaker is coming from, that they'd rather "feel momentarily / helpless" than the loneliness that has become sort of like routine in their life (I'm picturing an endless desert, in contrast to the sea image) but at the same time they haven't gotten used to it, the loneliness still weighs them down.
5 months ago
Seriously senyru, I don't know how you do this but it's some other level of poetry.
If I were you, I would have chosen poetry as my profession.
And I am shocked why no one nominated this.
I was going to say that first stanza is good, then I read the second one and I thought I would choose this it was better, but finally I read the third stanza and it was the best.
This is what you do with your every poem.
You start from good, move to better and end on its best.