Comments : De

  • 6 years ago

    by Em

    Hey I thought I'd come and check out some new poets work and I'm glad that I did because this even if it's simple it's fabulous in its simplicity if that makes sense.

    The title confused me at first as I wondered if this was a person to whom the poem was aimed at or something else so I decided to google the word and the interpretations are endless but I believe this to mean that it's being removed as usually de is added to or forms a verb which are usually linked to removal or reversal which is extremely clever in my opinion.

    The start is quite an interesting one as it puts an image in my mind that you as the narrator are standing there with a huge question mark above your head with the question of "why, why me? Why again?" And though it's a regular occurrence in my life it's a sad image when it's happening to someone else. I hope you don't mind but I'm going to leave my interpretation of this piece and I shall do so by separating the piece where fullstops are.

    Sometimes things are meant to happen for a reason. "Is it because of them? Is it because of me? Were we just not meant for each other?" These are questions I've asked on a regular basis and personally I think it's the latter. Remember people come and go and those worth our time stay.

    Sometimes having children together means nothing because these people melt under parenthood and can't cope therefore find every reason under the sun to leave us stranded. My only thought here is it's a big change from having 2 babies to being scared so possibly (just a suggestion) maybe leave a line space after the 2 babies line and then say "and it's scary thinking about being left all alone" or "and it's scary to dwell in the loneliness you left me with"

    This makes me question: is this a good or bad thing as they (I assume) gave you two precious gifts but left you as soon as things got difficult so I guess it's catch 22

    I totally understand this having friends with kids and they only want a break... Not to go out but to pamper themselves have a hot cuppa instead of a lukewarm one that's been warmed up five times and a nice hot bath/shower in peace because their children are always there not because of selfishness but because they know they need to look after themselves to be able to look after their children properly if that makes sense.

    Sometimes people think they know best but they don't. We're our own worst and best judge.

    The ending is powerful because it seems you've over thought things which we all do from time to time and the mess seems to have jumbled up in your mind and you question yourself if the decisions you've made are the correct ones and sometimes they aren't as we make them in haste and only think them over later which is usually too late.

    I like this alot and as I said I hope you don't mind me breaking up your piece.

    Em.x

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    Hi, first off welcome to P&Q. This is an interesting write. I understand where you are with this. A lot of us have been in terrible relationships and adding kids to the mix gives it a whole new dimension. When your partner is a controlling type it turns your relationship lopsided. Your write really hit this well. I hope you have found peace in your life, for you and your babies.

  • 6 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Welcome to the P&Q family..
    What a brilliantly penned piece.

    I felt the emotions all the way through this.

    Well done on this write and i hope you find peace.