A day of mist and heavy cloud has dawned -
The sun has woken blind and dampened down;
It's time this tired knight fell on his sword -
He sees the paint that proves he is a clown.
Behind the shields around are better men,
Whose blades are keen and minds are sharper still.
The dragon won't be beaten back again;
A poet cannot write without a quill.
At last, with armour, helm and sword removed,
This sorry figure makes for pastures new.
If nothing else, his worthy plight has proved,
He tried to fight the fight where roses grew.
To grief, this knight is well and truly wed -
I cannot lift the sword above my head.
Ben, you know how much I love your work which probably has a lot to do with it resonating with me so much but I have read this piece atleast 5 times this morning and it's still sitting heavy on my heart, this hasn't happened for some time with anyone's work.
1/The opening line (I like how you set it away from the others) was a real kick in the gut in itself because I instantly thought this isn't about the weather but about a person who has this disease we both know all about and it sits heavy on your heart and plays on your mind and it's like a storm going off in our minds, one which we cannot shift try as we might and though the sun shines even if a little the darkness never goes too far from us, does it? The image you make with your words is one of sadness - one of a knight fighting tooth and nail to save his people or his Princess from the evils of the world but not being able to save himself from the evils of his own mind and though this image is a sad one it it beautifully done with your majestic, smooth as glass rhyme.
2/ ok, so here I think you're trying to say there are better people than me in the world and I agree there maybe especially in your eyes but (and it's a big butt oops my mistake lol) they aren't you Ben, if that makes sense, as in there may be another Ben somewhere who has dealt with all you have in life but has dealt with it differently than you but it doesn't make him or you better than the other, it makes you both human and we all deal with everything in totally different ways as we all have different stress levels which you know. I guess what I'm trying to say is we're all equal apart from murderers etc get me? I also think dragon is another way of saying depression please correct me if I'm wrong.
3/ I currently have tears streaming down my face again after reading this piece for the final time because it shows what I said in my last piece was true 'some have been strong for too long' and you Mr P seem to have held off this blasted disease for some time now in my opinion and some days, weeks, months and years are much better than others. I have been fighting this for over 15 years now and sometimes I ask myself why am I still here etc but then other days i say to myself I'm here because I'm strong and I deserve to live to tell the tale of things that made me this way and like you I live to fight another day because we're strong and regardless of what we think, we are worth it.
Couplet/ That ending was like a "kick a person when they're down" type of ending and I don't mean in a bad way but when I first read this I had stopped blubbering then read the ending and started again lol you always have this way with words that moves me, makes me feel how you did when writing it and I know some days it's literal for you because I've been there so I truly hope writing this helped somewhat for now.