Comments : So Many Things

  • 1 month ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Time makes us wise to many things.

    Lovely melancholy write; reaching inside a raw core in each of us.

  • 1 month ago

    by Jamie

    I believe this is saying that you thought if a certaon person gave you wings you would climb out or in this case fly out of the darkness. But then you realized that in reality another person cannot help you. Only you can. And after these years nothing has helped you fly, not love, not writing.

    I do love the structure of the poem it self because each stanza brings about its own story, almost like past, present and future. And it seems that you are somewhat stuck in the past and maybe it is affecting your present. Maybe I'm reading too much into it.
    I especially loved the couplet. Those two lines hit me hard because they hold the most sadness, you feel defeated almost, like giving up.

    So well written.

    • 1 month ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you for this insightful comment, Jamie.

  • 1 month ago

    by mossgirl19

    Ben, this quite hit home, this believing in so many things. I didn't fly and I did learn my lesson...I need to really accept myself first. :-) That was deep, right?

    With every line I become more and more affected, which only means this is very effective, it's wonderfully written.

  • 1 month ago

    by S s...

    I always feel like I am free like a bird in the sky after reading your poems.
    Your poems are gift to this site.

    • 1 month ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, FV. Yours are pretty darn good too.

  • 1 month ago

    by Em

    No words could explain my thoughts on this

  • 1 month ago

    by Milly Hayward

    I could be entirely mis reading it but i felt this piece had a sad undertone as if you had believed you could do anything with this person's support but it's as if there is disillusionment as if the support hasn't been there or if it was it wasn't enough to encourage you to achieve your dream.
    It is certainly thought provoking in a good way. A most enjoyable read. Milly x

    • 1 month ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Not far off at all, Milly. Thank you

  • 1 month ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Beautiful Ben! It felt to me like the one person you tried to impress with your words wasn't as taken with them as everyone else? Like you need approval from someone that won't give it.
    Sad, thought provoking and brilliantly crafted as ever x
    =^.^=

  • 1 month ago

    by Michael

    Ben
    A wonderful piece from you.
    There are so many beliefs we hold, only to find out they may not of been how we wanted them to turn out.
    However keep believing fella
    Lovely poem
    Michael

  • 1 month ago

    by Mark

    Congratulations on the win!

  • 1 month ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Congratulations on a well deserved win. Best wishes Milly x

  • 1 month ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    The words are perfectly placed to make a poem so heart-wrenching that I feel the darkness, as if I'm in the cavern with you, desperate for a flame. It is dark in here, indeed.

    I hope you find some light, dearest Ben, for you're a soul deserving of that and so much more.

    Above all, I hope one day you can fly.

    Love,
    S

    • 1 month ago

      by Ben Pickard

      What lovely words, Stephen. Thank you.

  • 1 month ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Congratulations Ben. Love this x
    =^.^=

  • 1 month ago

    by Mihir Deshmukh

    Ah! the pain in this one! I absolutely loved it Ben. Congratulations on the win!!

    • 1 month ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Mihir and to you too.

  • 1 month ago

    by Kasie

    This is a very emotional, but we'll written piece. I enjoyed it thoroughly. Congratulations on the win Ben!

    • 1 month ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Thank you, Kasie and the same to you.

  • 1 month ago

    by Michael

    Well done Mr Pickard on front page news with a smasher :)

  • 1 month ago

    by S s...

    Congratulations Ben

  • 1 month ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Congrats Ben on your win

  • 1 month ago

    by Paul Hirst

    Great poem well deserved winner

    • 1 month ago

      by Ben Pickard

      Dagmar, Paul and Shane - thank you.

  • 1 month ago

    by Brenda

    Ok Ben, so I totally suck! How did this amazing write get past me? Oy Vey! I have no words for this write-truly amazing.

  • 4 weeks ago

    by MariAnn C.

    I love the detail in this. I pick up on both enthusiasm and despair.-
    A truly excellent piece. Thank you for writing it.

    MariAnn