Comments : I wish...

  • 6 years ago

    by CJ Maleney

    I really like this and I like the way you have tackled the subject. Depression is an elongated version of a short word beginning with F.

    The poem isn't generic by the way, not really! At least in my opinion, and that's worth less than dust.

    From a guy who rhymes a lot I do think you could have played with it a little and made it flow slightly better.

    However what comes flows, I sometimes write directly to site and if I do that it's as I think it. So I can't really criticise.

    Anyway all in all its a good piece

    Craig

    Ps glad to see you back

    • 6 years ago

      by Robert Long

      thank you craig and its good to be back

  • 6 years ago

    by Ya----Na

    A depressed person only need love and trust.
    Often we try to give them sympathy which is not right.
    They have all the strength inside them they just need love to trigger it.