Comments : Trench Love

  • 1 month ago

    by BlueJay

    This reminds me of the Gravenhurst song "Black Holes in the Sand". If you have not heard of it I highly recommend! (It's even fun to listen to while reading this piece, they actually go kinda well together.) It's a cool little write and I can't wait to see what else you can come up with and how the skills you show here will evolve and strengthen.

    • 1 month ago

      by C Cattaway

      Thankyou. I shall seek out the song x

  • 1 month ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Loved the rhyming and the tale of woe. I don't normally like repetitive line starts but keeping the lines short and punch really works. Milly x