Poseidon's Realm

by Risqué   Oct 19, 2017


I would swim the depths of the ocean
just to discover your roots.
I would relinquish every breath to dive in and find
whatever has caused your tidal waves of worry.
I've spent so much time in the undertow
trying to dispel your fears.
Why won't you
believe me
love me
leave me
Anything just to stop drowning
in this turbid sea.
Years, I've spent, tasting saltwater;
my eyes and chest burning.
I want nothing more than to finally find
the gold you have hidden inside these seas:
The treasures you have promised me.

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  • 1 month ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Wonderful use of extended metaphor. I am just sorry I am out of nominations as this should be on the front page, in my opinion.

    Take care and all the best,

    Ben

    • 1 month ago

      by Risqué

      Thank you!
      The opinion that it should means more to me then a win, or nomination.

  • 1 month ago

    by Mark

    Beautiful Risqué, great title, very personal. I hope you find the realm in him - and for him to show you the gold within.

    • 1 month ago

      by Risqué

      I hope so too, thank you.

  • 1 month ago

    by Michael

    Hi Risqué

    I love the title of your poem..
    A heart-felt piece of a sense of drowning in hopeless waters. A feeling of desperation to be just trusted. I love the flow and pace as with all your work.
    Sorry that sadness is running a thread through your ink
    Much love
    Michael :)x

  • 1 month ago

    by Milly Hayward

    I think my interpretation is slightly different from. Black hole lol. I think the character is someone who has spent s long time being supportive to a loved one reassuring them that he would still go to any lengths to get to the bottom of what's caused the worry in their life.

    Its like the love of his life constantly questions his love upsets him And puts him through hell and promises that things one day will be fine but it never is. The writer despite this is still promising support but wishing for the day when the promises will come true. Molly x

    • 1 month ago

      by Risqué

      This. We’ve been together nine years and married for three. How long it will take for him to believe me and trust me is exhausting and unknown to me.

  • 1 month ago

    by Black hole

    I think this poem is about telling the person whom you love that there is no need to worry and you will go in depth of his heart to find the cause of those worries.
    Even though, it would take your life, you are willing to take that risk.
    So that you can dispel his fears.
    His fears of drowning in false love once again, when your love for him is sincere.
    You want him to love you, believe in you or at last you want him to tell you that he doesn't love you so that you should stop yourself from drowning in this one sided love.
    But you can't even do that. You have waited for him a long time and your tears have almost burnt your chest with hope of his return.
    And finally, you want nothing, just the person you loved once who had a heart of gold because that is the real treasure you have been looking for.

    I am Sorry, if anything wrong with interpretation.

    • 1 month ago

      by Risqué

      If your interprets meant something to you personally then that is what matters, regardless of my meaning behind it

      “Years, I've spent, tasting saltwater;
      my eyes and chest burning.”

      This line in particular spoke to how my eyes were burning from saltwater tears and my chest from the saltwater of the never ending sea.

      Thank you for reading

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