Comments : Tonight, I’m Sorrow

  • 6 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    I really enjoyed this small, to-the-point piece about the neverending cycle that is depression.

    I am curious your reasoning behind the comma after "now". I reread it with and without, and couldn't decide; perhaps the word "hollow" was so important to you that you needed to ensure that the reader paused before the word "hollow" was read and sunk in?

    Regardless, a piece that was written in 2016 is still relevant today, and will remain as such long after you and I are gone. Timeless, great job.

    IdTakeABulletForYou

    • 6 years ago

      by Everlasting

      I do like the pause. Thank you guys for reading.

  • 6 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Lovely little piece LL.