Comments : Like a Reflex

  • 6 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Oh wow!! im loving the repetition in this piece..
    It reads nicely and is such a beautiful poem.. Well done.

  • 6 years ago

    by ddavidd

    I am not sure the word reflex really reflect the beautiful soul of this piece. Perhaps my bad. The repetition however has given a sort of internal rhythm to the piece.
    The angle in this piece is so unique. I think as a poet you are so mature now, knowing how to place your eyes exactly where there should be. And this is a huge achievement in poetical endeavor in my book. I think this is the most crucial aspect of poetry writing: the angle, finding where the eyes belong .

  • 6 years ago

    by Scott Cole

    I love it Mossy

  • 6 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    This is great Mel, especially the ending .. clichés are clichés because they're so often true! I also really love the idea of love (with the right person) is very reflexive :-) x
    =^.^=

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    Miss Mel

    A wonderful piece of writing from you about 'reflex' I like the way you have used the differences that reflect the ending of repeating is all you can do and yes like a reflex in life.
    Well done and worthy of my nomination :)
    Much love
    Michael x

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Clever writing, Mel.

    Take care,

    Ben

  • 6 years ago

    by Mark

    Mel this is wonderful, I love the repetition. ..the nostaligia..the love expressed. Beautiful!

  • 6 years ago

    by Ya----Na

    Beautiful Mel
    Loved it.

  • 6 years ago

    by BlueJay

    While I am definitely not a fan of the repetition (it was a little too bland to really get at the heart of where you were going in my opinion) at the beginning of so many stanzas I think this is still a decently penned poem and I wish you well in the weekly contest.

    • 6 years ago

      by mossgirl19

      I really like your honesty, Maddie. Thank you.

      Thanks all for your comments. :-)

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    Lady Mel, I just love this! When we are in a relationship there are so many things that are just you and him. When that relationship is no longer our minds still keep those loops going. I really liked how you repeated certain phrases and certain words. It really lends well with your write-